Saturday, 20 June 2009

Godman

I redid the middle panels. Hopefully the facial expressions are a little more clear now.

8 comments:

myeyeisonfire said...

comments on luke's work from other contributors would be helpful please!

MurrayMah said...

Hey luke, haha got to admit bit awkward giving construct crit to someone you haven't met, but are going to? I really enjoy the tone of the godman strips, theyre pretty hilarious. The left hand panel in the middle row is a great addition, but on the middle panel I'm not sure about the black shadow around the speech bubble? Hope this helps

cherry said...

yes i agree with murrah. i was pretty unsure who was speaking and where it was coming from.

myeyeisonfire said...

I'm not so comfortable with the straight on view of God's face

Milan said...

i think the straight on view is kind of okay because it gives the whole strip some symmetry and balance.
mayyyyybe black out the far right panel in the middle row instead of that black dark patch behind god?
wicked expressions and nice angles.

left-handed osi-cat said...

hey
i quite liked how the style reminds a bit more european comics such as Asterix&Ovelix art..
personally i liked the zooming on the god's face and the expressions that follow..they add more comic and comical (as in funny) flavor to it..
i would say that maybe the cloud at the top right panel needs a bit of shading jus so it balances with the really dark cloud beneath it..?

left-handed osi-cat said...

*jus noticed now..the right hand of the god that holds the grapes at the top panel lookes a bit awkard..is there a way to fix it a bit? (well unless that s what you wanted it to be like so yea..)

space-in-mind said...

Thanks for all precise comments my comics have never been critiqued as well as this before! I'll make some changes and post a new one up!