Ok I'm confident that this story actually makes sense now - and that the drawings have improved! In my mind theres still lots of improvements and things to be learned in the way I use this particular media (ink pen) to do my storyboards but I think its getting there! I'm not happy with the 4th panel on the 3rd page - from viewing it on the screen the perspective looks completely wrong so am going to return to that and re - do again! I have another story to ink so hopefully that one will be even better! Please let me know what you think, thanks.