My comic will be named "Rise of a hero"
The 4 pages willl lead to how unfortunate events and error help a strong emoptional human being rise up to claim for those who cannot fend for themselves.
Page 1
Panel 1: Young man crying and looking sad.
Panel 2: A flash shot of a grave saying dear mum rest in peace.
Panel 3: Back to the young boys face with the palm of his hands covering his face, but you can see through it the boys face, you can see the emotions of anger, hatred, pain and sadness.
{Why did she die!!!!! Why me!?!?! If I only I.......}
Panel 4: 2rd page down: Grandad holding his arms up to the young boys shoulders, comforting him.
Grand pa. {Its ok son, your mother loved you very mutch and always wanted the best for you.}
Young boy. {Its my fault grandpa... YOU KNOW THIS!!!!}
Grandpa. {It takes a special person to rise through tough circumstance and the unexpected.}
{And you my son are special!!}
Page 2
1 week later
Panel 1: A far shot of jaino in the gym:
Panel 2: A group of guys take notice of jaino, and start whsipering to each other.
Tough guy 1 {Hey yo mack theres the chump the left his mother to die}
tough guy 2 {Man he dont even deserve to be steping foot in this place}
tough guy 1 {dont worry home boy, ill let the punk ass bitch start doing weights then ima throw his ass out}
panel 3: Jaino picks up heavy dumbells strugeling to lift them up while (having Flashbacks of his mum shouting at him to run...)
Panel 4: Tears start to emerge as he throws the weights on the floor. The tough goons start laughing in the background.
Panel 5: The tough guys1 interigate Jaino {Yo Jaino you punk ass leting yo mama die.}
Tough guy 2 joins in {Man you a lowlife get the hll outa here you punk.}
panel 6: jaino looks down, in dispointment.
Panel 7: The tough guys laugh harder and harder.
Panel 8: Close up of jainos face, his eyes start to emit a strangle enlectric sort of sparkle.
Pnael 9: Grandpa bursts in the scene
Grandpa. {Jaino! JAINO! WAIT!!!}
Page 3
Panel 10: Jainos angry face turns into an inoscent look.
Jaino. {Gran.. Grandpa??}
panel 10: The confused tough goons look confused and scared.
Tough guy 1 {Man whts up with this freak what the hell are you}
Tough guy 2 { Lets leave him...}
Panel 11: Grandpa looking furious and starts pointing at the goons.
Grandpa {Yeah thats right leave him...!! Pick on someone your own size you BULLIES!}
{Pick on me!!!}
Panel 12: Grandpa takes the self hurt Jaino away and comforts him.
Pnel 13: Grandpa puts his arm around jano.
Grandpa. {Jaino theres something you must know}
Panel 14: Grandpa goes into a descriptine figurative face.
Grandpa {theres a reason why your mum told you to run that day..}
Panel 15: Jaino stands up in anger
Jaino. {What reason!!! iM A COWARD ITS THAT SIMPLE!!!}
Panel 16: grandpa looks back in a self asserted look
Grandpa. {Your mother told you to run because if you stayed something terrible would have heppened}
Panel 17: Grandpa keeps speaking
Grandpa. {It was too early for you to be tested, the consequences would have been devenstating.}
panel 18: Grandpa looks adjust and self asserted:
Grandpa. (Jaino you are SPECIAL!!)
Panel 19: Jaino looks confused and angry
Jaino. { GRANDPA WHAT HAVE YOU AND MUM BEEN KEEPING FROM ME}
Panel 20: grandpa looks across the confused and angry jaino
Grandpa. {Jaino your mothers death was not in vain!}
{Through your mothers sacrafice, loads more innoscent lives will be saved!)
panel 21: Jaino shots out at grandpa in a frustrated shout
Jaino. {Grandpa! WHAT HAVE YOU BEEN KEEPING!!}
Panel 22: Grandpa looks back at jaino in self asserment.
Grandpa. {Jaino you are a mutant alien suparman!}
Panel 22: Jaino looks in schock
Jaino. {WHAT?!?!?!)
Panel 24: Grandpa cracks ouy laughing.
Grandpa. {Im joking!}
Panel 25: Jaino gives a retarded look towards grandpas joke...
Jaino. {Grandpa your such an asshole! Tel mw the truth...}
Panel 26: Grandpa walks up the stairs with jaino following behind
Panel 27: Grandpa kneeling down onto a chest that's in the attic.
Grandpa. {It all happened 20 years ago...}
I haven't really worked out the size of the panels which will be bigger or not, but i have a fair indication which scenes deserves flash sort of page treatment, i want to combine the old cliche of slowly drawing the reader in, the cliche that Jaino is an important super hero after all, it follows a bit in the footsteps of Spiderman.
This will be drawn and aimed at dc marvel type consumers
The end.
3 comments:
Although a very stereo typical script, it does draw me in, that is until we get to:
Panel 22: Grandpa looks back at jaino in self asserment.
"Grandpa. {Jaino you are a mutant alien suparman!}
Panel 22: Jaino looks in schock
Jaino. {WHAT?!?!?!)
Panel 24: Grandpa cracks ouy laughing.
Grandpa. {Im joking!}
Panel 25: Jaino gives a retarded look towards grandpas joke...
Jaino. {Grandpa your such an asshole! Tel mw the truth...}
then I just think it's silly - having said that, I did say - the better the drawings the more you can get away with average storytelling, and the more exceptional the story, the less important it is to have fantastic drawing skills - e.g. Maus & Persepolis
let's see some rough visuals to go with it by Tuesday
that was an experimentation to lighten up the mood a little bit, i felt i got the scene too tense too early. It is a draft and i might take it out im not to sure...
I want to sort of bring rel life qualities to the character, as people have always ran away from something. anyway can relate to running away from someone a bully or w/e.
And for the drawings im gona do what Alex Ross does, by taking pictures of different posses and angles, so wen it comes to drawing i can use those poses as reference.
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