Monday, 19 October 2009

how the elephant got his trunk




Hey
This is a short story I working on to build on my narrative and style. I looked at aboriginal rock art and they visual language. below is an image from the Wandjina tribe that inspired me alot. I need to redo the text on the computer, but apart from that I'm pleased with the result, your thoughts please.

4 comments:

Chiu said...

witty! It would work better without the "SHIT" at the end

also be great to see a series of how other animals got their distinctive parts of bodies?

Jess Watson said...

I like it though as chiu says the shit part isnt really necessary...afterall if you got rid of it you could aim it at children. The cave painting style is also a great idea...

I think there is a kids book called how the zebra got its stripes...oh the greedy zebra! http://www.amazon.co.uk/Greedy-Zebra-African-Animal-Tales/dp/0340409126
but there are lots of other possibilties...giraffes might be interesting!

Ps is this part of your new crop of suckers you lured in?

Dan Griffin-Hayes said...

Good character design and clever concept.

Alex Hovey said...

thanks for you advice, I'm now working on a story about the platypus based on aboriginal legend